tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1393073171356696960.post7363150114044628727..comments2010-11-16T07:35:59.154-08:00Comments on America in the World: 2010: Fragments and Run-OnsProf. T.http://www.blogger.com/profile/00284898866409356025noreply@blogger.comBlogger19125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1393073171356696960.post-4108471218861707532010-11-16T07:35:59.154-08:002010-11-16T07:35:59.154-08:00@ Melissa - Hmmm . . your sentences is grammatical...@ Melissa - Hmmm . . your sentences is grammatically correct, but does it make sense? Look again.Prof. T.https://www.blogger.com/profile/00284898866409356025noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1393073171356696960.post-44792532564497363652010-11-15T18:34:13.786-08:002010-11-15T18:34:13.786-08:00Before departing to Iraq during the gulf war, Swof...Before departing to Iraq during the gulf war, Swofford and fellow marines felt the Vietnam films watched were anti-war, therefore making them more eager to fight.Melissa Shttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11739405134388241977noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1393073171356696960.post-90359112765199446182010-11-15T07:31:17.051-08:002010-11-15T07:31:17.051-08:00@ Sophia - Two great corrections!@ Sophia - Two great corrections!Prof. T.https://www.blogger.com/profile/00284898866409356025noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1393073171356696960.post-76649301511599934982010-11-14T19:00:32.498-08:002010-11-14T19:00:32.498-08:001)The novel "Jarhead" by Swofford descri...1)The novel "Jarhead" by Swofford describes watching films about the Vietnam War with his fellow marines. He explains for them that these films didn't come across as antiwar, but instead made them eager to fight.<br />3) Appy's points out the U.S. army during the Iraq War are all volunteers. They each have many different ideologies and many different reasons for joining the army.Sophiahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04114403866326532583noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1393073171356696960.post-19254011147604966202010-11-11T11:40:40.220-08:002010-11-11T11:40:40.220-08:00In the book “Jarhead” Anthony Swofford describes w...In the book “Jarhead” Anthony Swofford describes watching films about the Vietnam War with his fellow marines ,Before leaving for Iraq. During the first Gulf War for them these films were not anti-war in fact they made them more eager to have the opportunity to go and fight.saliha lipihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11664454829731152989noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1393073171356696960.post-81284640073411049932010-11-11T11:11:14.867-08:002010-11-11T11:11:14.867-08:00@ Sophia - #1 is still a run-on. #3: now a run-on....@ Sophia - #1 is still a run-on. #3: now a run-on.<br />@Nyashia: First sentence is great; the second is still a run-on.<br />@ Johnny - don't capitalize after a semi-colon.<br />@Ivette - #3 is great. #1 has one correct sentence and one run-on.Prof. T.https://www.blogger.com/profile/00284898866409356025noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1393073171356696960.post-51178065797231356722010-11-11T11:07:33.289-08:002010-11-11T11:07:33.289-08:00@ Sweets: two good sentences.
@ Miriam: The first...@ Sweets: two good sentences. <br />@ Miriam: The first sentence of the revised version is great. The second is still a run on.<br />@ Tashibay - Two great corrections.<br />@ Muhammad: #1: The first sentence of the revised version is great. The second is still a run on. #3: still a fragment.<br />@ Raphael: #1: great correction<br />#3 -moving to something good, but the first is still a fragment.Prof. T.https://www.blogger.com/profile/00284898866409356025noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1393073171356696960.post-26853668918578835742010-11-11T11:04:07.485-08:002010-11-11T11:04:07.485-08:001) Swofford describes watching films about the Vie...1) Swofford describes watching films about the Vietnam War with his fellow marines before leaving for Iraq. During the first Gulf War, for them these films were not antiwar in fact they made them more eager to have the opportunity to go and fight. <br /><br />3) As Appy shows, even though the U.S. army during the Iraq War are all volunteers, with many different ideologies and with many different reasons for joining the army, others went against their will.Ivette Shttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05123075746827189230noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1393073171356696960.post-69184453636112546482010-11-11T11:00:15.797-08:002010-11-11T11:00:15.797-08:00Swofford describes watching films about the Vietna...Swofford describes watching films about the Vietnam War with his fellow marines before leaving for Iraq during the first Gulf War;For them these films were not antiwar in fact they made them more eager to have the opportunity to go and fight.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1393073171356696960.post-74929925853037070862010-11-11T10:59:23.009-08:002010-11-11T10:59:23.009-08:001)Swofford describes watching films about the Viet...1)Swofford describes watching films about the Vietnam War with his fellow marines, for them these films were not antiwar in fact they made them more eager to have the opportunity to go and fight. <br />3)Appy shows the U.S. army during the Iraq War are all volunteers, They each have many different ideologies and many different reasons for joining the army.Sophiahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04114403866326532583noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1393073171356696960.post-13382030133666049012010-11-11T10:56:47.408-08:002010-11-11T10:56:47.408-08:00"Jarhead", by Anthony Swofford describes..."Jarhead", by Anthony Swofford describes watching films about the Vietnam War with his fellow marines before leaving for Iraq. Swofford depicts how these films were not anti-war,in fact it made it more eager for them to go and engage in war.Nyashia Mariehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05269680534451937064noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1393073171356696960.post-45267970535239801052010-11-11T10:53:29.375-08:002010-11-11T10:53:29.375-08:001) Sawford describes watching films about the Viet...1) Sawford describes watching films about the Vietnam War with his fellow marines before leaving for Iraq during the first Gulf War, but for them these films were not antiwar. In fact they made them more eager to have the opportunity to go and fight. <br /><br />3) In his essay “Class Wars” author Christian Appy shows, even though the U.S. army during the Iraq War are all volunteers, with many different ideologies and with many different reasons for joining. US soldiers are in the majority of the lower class.Reynosohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16180029710800028109noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1393073171356696960.post-79768641148190579292010-11-11T10:52:11.202-08:002010-11-11T10:52:11.202-08:001) Swofford describes watching films about the Vie...1) Swofford describes watching films about the Vietnam War with his fellow marines, before leaving for Iraq during the first Gulf War. For them these films were not antiwar in fact, they made them more eager to have the opportunity to go and fight. <br /><br />3) As Appy shows,the U.S. army during the Iraq War are all volunteers, with many different ideologies and with many different reasons for joining the armyMuhammad Adnan Sadiqhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18026126605957060559noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1393073171356696960.post-64867335623877665502010-11-11T10:49:11.788-08:002010-11-11T10:49:11.788-08:002) In his speech "Beyond Vietnam," King ...2) In his speech "Beyond Vietnam," King critiques not only U.S. policy in that war, but also the ideologies of materialism and militarism that he says will put the U.S. "on the wrong side of a world revolution." <br /><br />i would change it from a quote to a sentence and switch around some of the words if this was the second time it was used in a essay but if it was the first time it would be used i would keep the title but phase it differently into "in the speech by dr.king from the story "beyond vietnam" then continue with the sentence.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1393073171356696960.post-24477281643990122962010-11-11T10:49:00.201-08:002010-11-11T10:49:00.201-08:001)Anthony Swafford - in his book Jarhead - says th...1)Anthony Swafford - in his book Jarhead - says that after having watched films about the Vietnam War with his fellow marines, before leaving for Iraq during the first Gulf War, they appeared to them for not being antiwar. In fact, they made them more eager to have the opportunity to go and fight. <br />2) In his speech "Beyond Vietnam" - King critiques not only U.S. policy in that war, but also the ideologies of materialism and militarism. He anticipates that this will put the U.S. "on the wrong side of a world revolution."<br /> 3) Appy argues that the U.S. army soldiers during the Iraq War were all volunteers. All of them had different ideologies and many different reasons for joining the army.Tashibayhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13755696218429625219noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1393073171356696960.post-71782343718145939652010-11-11T10:46:15.215-08:002010-11-11T10:46:15.215-08:00Swofford describes watching films about the Vietna...Swofford describes watching films about the Vietnam War with his fellow marines,before leaving for Iraq during the first Gulf War. For them these films were not aniwar in fact they made them eager to go and fight.miriamcampoverdehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05546668061321880985noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1393073171356696960.post-48303747584369639582010-11-11T10:45:55.023-08:002010-11-11T10:45:55.023-08:00This comment has been removed by the author.Sophiahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04114403866326532583noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1393073171356696960.post-83588387378768572202010-11-11T10:44:31.803-08:002010-11-11T10:44:31.803-08:00Appy points out that although the U.S. army during...Appy points out that although the U.S. army during the Iraq war were all volunteers, they all had differing ideologies and reasons for joining.Sweets Ambassadorhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05945569230297887582noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1393073171356696960.post-63999861112156976122010-11-11T10:41:22.982-08:002010-11-11T10:41:22.982-08:00In Jarhead,a book by Anthony Swafford, Swafford de...In Jarhead,a book by Anthony Swafford, Swafford describes watching films about the Vietnam war with his fellow marines before leaving for Iraq. He feels that for them the films were not anti-war, but rather they made them more eager to fight.Sweets Ambassadorhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05945569230297887582noreply@blogger.com